ZDaemon

[capodecima]

Hello my first map coming !!!
I worked two nights on the map and this is my result
prefer os settings here
wad will soon be placed on Oblacek
gb and gl on the map


edit:

ok so i fix failed textured and optimalized for skulltag , zdoom and zdaemon enjoy
http://www.edisk.cz/stahni/95093/capoquake.wad_72.26KB.html

any pictures:


http://img692.imageshack.us/img692/2384/screen1qa.png

http://img4.imageshack.us/img4/4926/screen2jb.png

[ZERO99]

ok so your new to this section that's fine.

please look at other threads in this section, we kinda expect a better explaination of the map along with screenshots and recommended DM flags and settings. usually projects start off in Wad editing section before coming to Zdreview, this section is for 100% completed projects ( no your map is not completed there are many texture miss alighnments)

I would keep your first projects to yourself till you gain more skills before releasing anymore matterial to the public for playing. try using the wad editing section people will tell you what you could improve upon and help you out there.

[Kruczyslaw]

here you go: http://doom.kruczyslaw.cx.cc/wads/capoquake.zip

[TheCupboard]

Heh, when you have curves, you sure do make them smooth!

Your texture choice comes across as crude at times. For instance, the mixing of the ashwall textures and the the metal base theme clashes. Use a few extra vertices on each ladder rung to make it so the texture doesn't get interrupted. Making use of lower and upper unpegging will also make things look better. Also, you can only activate the lift by pressing from one side when it looks like you should be able to press it from two sides. I'd consider moving some health around. You have 3 medikits and 9 stimpacks placed very close together.

I don't have any big suggestions for the layout except maybe to have a way to lower the bars from the outside. The height differences are interesting and there could be some nice strategy used at various points in the map. Having a decent layout for your first map is pretty good actually. Most authors usually miss the mark COMPLETELY with their first stuff.

Also, consider posting your next work in the wad editing section like Zero pointed out. That way you can get comments as you work on it and ask that your topic be moved to ZDReview when you're good and ready.

[capodecima]

thanks you for support and thanks Kruczyslaw and ZERO99

[Sniper]

Well I had a look at this capo, and I think you have some nice ideas here for a first mapping attempt. The map layout itself seemed more Free For All to me, but then again so do most the maps I created for duel

There are quite a few texture misalignments throughout the map, but these are easily fixed if you go back to this (Doom Builder can even do most of the aligning automatically for you). I wasn't quite sure about the lava pit for a duel map, it may work better if there was a way to get out of it like a lift or teleport etc, and the player would only be punished by taking 30% damage for falling down instead of having to die to escape.

The walls in the outside area are a little bland for my taste, this could be made less apparent by adding some kind of waterfalls leading into the pool at the bottom which I think could look nice.

But like I said at the beginning there are some good original ideas here and this map could be quite good with a little more elbow grease. And is by far one of the better first mapping attempts I've seen, good work.

[Cybershark]

Glad you fixed up most of the errors in the original version of this - the flat/texture mix and those curved lines that were drawn off the map area. You still have some missing textures in the ground where those bars drop down, but technically then it seems fine other than that.

The map feels very old-school due to the scale, primitive visuals and the haphazard item distribution. The flow seems quite lacking in the indoor tunnels too, so I'm not sure I'd want to play it as a 1on1. And the outside area is such a drop down I think freelook would be advised on it.

I like the BFG run-around and the other guns seem fairly sensibly placed - until we get to those tunnels which are just horrible. Don't like the sheer dropdown there - far too campable. It'd be better to give the lift a different texture to the surrounding walls too, because it's not always clear if you're looking at that lift or the wall behind it
The lava is ok... but I'd prefer higher sector damage than that because it takes far too long to die with the blue armor. Or, like Sniper says, have some way out of it. That armor seems too close to the plasma as well - and I'm really not a fan of the plasma in the darkness either

Definitely interesting but far from perfect and seems like it'd take a long time to play out as a duel.